My second reply to Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge #33: Silent cascade, using her photo and suggested words: (cascade, tresses, eagle, abandon and rippling) differs from my first, in that the first verse has four lines, allowing the addition of a fifth verse.
Cascade ~ four (or more) three-line stanzas, without rhyme
~ three lines of the first verse used successively as last lines of following verses
~ line pattern A/B/C, d/e/A, f/g/B, h/i/C, (j/k/D, etc.)
~ longer poems may be created by having a longer first verse
Image source: Wikipedia (Silence, Waterfall and Forest by Arthur Brown Davies (1862-1928)
Cascade
Spreading, falling with abandon
A cascade of light and sound surrounds me
Darkness banished, and with it silence
Life apparent in all I see
Water rushing outward, downward
Plunging swiftly from the brink
Spreading, falling with abandon
Tresses of vapor stream in a brilliant rainbow
Encompassing the water’s roar
A cascade of light and sound surrounds me
Here I stand, across the mighty pool at its base
Waves of light and sound rippling outward in an arc
Darkness banished, and with it silence
Eagle soaring overhead, stag pausing to drink
Even the very trees, all that breathes feel this force
Life apparent in all I see
rivrvlogr 
This one vibrates with life!
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🙂
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I love the immediacy of this–so vivid, filled with motion, and in the moment!
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I was happy with my first poem, but I decided I also wanted something that expressed vibrancy.
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Both good, just different. 🙂
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Excellent! I appreciate the time to take to define each type of poetry. I have learned so much here. I have been inspired to try my hand at poetry again. Thank you!
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🙂 I hope we’ll see some of that.
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I got brave http://www.thejourneyofamillionmiles.com/?p=315
My first one was called Vermont…and then I did ode to Kansas. I’m a little bashful with my poetry!
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Very beautiful…life in all that I see…
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Thank you.
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My pleasure
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I love all the motion in this, with the water at its core.
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You managed to create a real 3D feeling of the water and light. 🙂
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Thank you. Subconsciously, I may have been trying to match the depth of the scene in the painting, the falls being distant and the peaks even more so.
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This is visually stunning. It really does go with the beautiful painting. Beautifully written. Love Joni
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Thank you. 🙂
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My pleasure. Have a great week. Hugs Joni
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