Immersion ~ concrete poetry


Today is Day 9 of National/Global Poetry Writing Month,
and the prompt at is to write a concrete poem,
one in which the lines and words are organized to take
a shape that reflects in some way the theme of the poem.

Unfortunately, I’m having difficulty formatting the text on the page
in the WordPress editor, but the lower half of the image shows how it appears on my screen.
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Formatted differently, the poem might appear as below.


More than a tool, in my hands
this paddle is an extension of myself,
the limits of my energy removed,
creating a connection with that which
already is the core of my essence,
in turn allowing me to become as one
with the very nature of all that surrounds me
and affects me so profoundly.


Sweet Water

sweet water.jpg

Sweet Water

When the river calls
I do not
ask why, but follow
where she will take me.
I know no other way.

If you want to try magnetic poetry, you can do it online, here.

Background image: The mouth of the Moreau River, at the Missouri River.



I have known waves
felt them
seen them
their heat parching my throat,
shimmering on a desert horizon

I have known waves
felt them
seen them
washing over me as I surface
above a tropical reef

I have known waves
felt them
seen them
your body close to mine
your mere presence the source

Of the waves I have known,
these, as they lift me
consume me,
are like water in the desert,
always most welcome to me

The WordPress Daily Post prompt is water.

Image source:


My second reply to Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge #33: Silent cascade, using her photo and suggested words: (cascade, tresses, eagle, abandon and rippling) differs from my first, in that the first verse has four lines, allowing the addition of a fifth verse.
Cascade ~ four (or more) three-line stanzas, without rhyme
               ~ three lines of the first verse used successively as last lines of following verses
               ~ line pattern A/B/C, d/e/A, f/g/B, h/i/C, (j/k/D, etc.)
               ~ longer poems may be created by having a longer first verse
Image source: Wikipedia (Silence, Waterfall and Forest by Arthur Brown Davies (1862-1928)

Peace, If Not Quiet


Spreading, falling with abandon
A cascade of light and sound surrounds me
Darkness banished, and with it silence
Life apparent in all I see

Water rushing outward, downward
Plunging swiftly from the brink
Spreading, falling with abandon

Tresses of vapor stream in a brilliant rainbow
Encompassing the water’s roar
A cascade of light and sound surrounds me

Here I stand, across the mighty pool at its base
Waves of light and sound rippling outward in an arc
Darkness banished, and with it silence

Eagle soaring overhead, stag pausing to drink
Even the very trees, all that breathes feel this force
Life apparent in all I see


Still Water… #writephoto

Still Water

Setting sun framed by ancient hewn stone
Silent clouds, once ablaze, now mute
Reflection on still water
The final fading light
Enticing, luring
To enter

The Thursday Photo Prompt – Still water… #writephoto, by Sue Vincent at Daily Echo, is a window framing still waters.  I’ve tweaked the contrast to give a little more definition to the clouds and sunset.
Nonet ~ a poem of nine lines and a syllable pattern of 9-8-7-6-5-4-3-2-1, with rhyme optional


Such a Still Water – tan renga

Such a Still Water

such a still water
even the dragonfly
splash it with the tail
                         © Tan Taigi

setting sun walks on water
no footsteps to show its path

This is my response to Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge Month May 27th, write two lines to follow a given hokku, essentially creating a tanka.  The original haiku is by classical haiku poet Tan Taigi (1709-1771).

Image: Sunset on the Niagara River


Carpe Diem Tan Renga