Far, I have traveled
to reach your side
in distance
and years
then
here
now
each step
of my past
once full of life
cast then in shadow
searching for a way
out of darkness
as each turn
brings me
here
now
with
a light
as a sign
welcoming me
as I join your side
Day Twenty-Two of 2016 NaPoWriMo.
Photo provided by Sue Vincent in her Thursday Photo Prompt – Spiral #writephoto.
As I wrote this, I envisioned the final version appearing as a descent followed by an ascent – steps leading down and then up – and that’s how I laid it out on the page as I wrote. I suppose I could call it an orb, but even following the syllable count I used – 5,4,3,2,1,1,1,2,3,4,5,5,4,3,2,1,1,1,2,3,4,5 – (I know, a real headache, right?) doesn’t guarantee it will be anywhere near symmetrical. To show you what I envisioned, I stretched Sue’s photo into a square and layered text over it, to be read counterclockwise… top left – to bottom left – to bottom right – to top right. And you thought this was confusing to begin with!
Ken G.
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Love the shape! And a beautiful poem.
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Than you.
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I love the poem–and both shapes. Very clever!
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🙂
Keeping a semblance of symmetry meant tailoring the words (even within the syllable count).
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I like the way it winds, rather like the stair.
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Thanks! That was one of my goals.
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nicely done
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Thank you, Paul.
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a very shapely poem – thank you for sharing 🙂
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As much as I wanted that the circle to be a part of the poem, I was afraid it would detract from it. However, since it was the inspiration, I think the image is just as important and works well with the shape.
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You are an architect of words . . .
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Thank you, Peter. There were no blueprints, so I had to improvise – use my own risers for the stairs. 😉
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Looks great superimposed on the photo. And you can read it lots of different ways, and it still works. (K)
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Thanks! I actually considered also making it a cleave poem, but I realized that was too much of a project for what I was trying to attain.
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the shape of the hills and valleys of a journey – goes so splendidly with your poem, enhancing what is already a wonderful expression. I just might have to use the form myself 🙂 could call it a “terrain form”
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hank you. It does present possibilities.
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Of course, that should be Thank you!
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Beautiful: very effective visually and poetically 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
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I didn’t get the stair connection, to me it was more like a river, winding me towards your destiny…
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Either way, a journey.
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Love the shape, in both your original writing and layered on the photo. Such a clever creative piece. Well done! KL ❤
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Thank you. It seemed like the only way to write it.
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Inventive, succinct. Well done, Ken!
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Thank you, Robert.
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Love how your poem forms a circle. Very nicely done.
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Thank you. 🙂
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