flock of geese takes wing ~ haiku


flock of geese takes wing
ribbon of moonlight shadows
steel rails glistening

This haiku is my response to Carpe Diem #1788
In the Moonlit Night (Revise That Haiku),
which is to revise the following classic haiku by Masaoka Shiki.

the wild geese take flight
low along the railroad tracks
in the moonlit night
              Masaoka Shiki

Image source: Wikimedia Commons
Geese and the Moon, by Ohara Koson

pheasant’s flight too short ~ fusion haiku

pheasant's flight too short_3

Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #56 Crossroads offers four haiku,
from four different haijin, from which to write a fusion haiku.

a strange flower
for birds and butterflies
the autumn sky

the pheasant cries
as if it just noticed
the mountain

the winter river;
down it come floating
flowers offered to Buddha

just outside the gate
the road slopes downward
winter trees

My first haiku fuses Bashō and Issa:

pheasant’s flight too short
to keep up with butterfly
mountain looking down

pheasant's flight too short

My second haiku fuses Issa, Buson and Shiki:

path follows river
flowing down from high mountain
pheasant tracks in snow

path follows river_a

Harvard Art Museums – Butterflies, by Kubo Shanman
Museum of Fine Arts Boston Golden Pheasant and Snow Covered Pine, by Utagawa Hiroshige

fanning the paddies with hope ~ tan renga

fanning the paddies with hopelocusts fly low
over rice paddies
in the dim sunlight
                    Masaoka Shiki

 fanning the paddies with hope
saving rice for our next meal

Carpe Diem’s Tan Renga Challenge September 2018
Chained Together III (10) locusts fly low
(Add to the provided hokku by Masaoka Shiki
to create a tanka)

Image source: Museum of Fine Arts Boston
Locust and Red Dragonfly, by Kitagawa Utamaro

pink cherry weeping ~ tan renga

pink cherry weepingpink cherry weeping
orchard scarred by violence
damaged fruits of war

 pear tree in full bloom on a battlefield
collapsed house becomes beautiful again
                         Masaoka Shiki

 There’s a twist in Carpe Diem’s Tan Renga Challenge September 2018 Chained Together III (8) pear tree in bloom, in that a haiku by Masaoka Shiki has been converted by Kristjaan into two lines to form the response, and we are asked to create the hokku to precede it. My hokku (haiku) appears in blue.

Image source: Museum of Fine Arts Boston
Bird and Weeping Cherry, by Utagawa Hiroshige

scent and color pale – after the storm

Carpe Diem Weekend-Meditation #24 Revise That Haiku
offers two classic haiku: 

in the moonlight,
the color and scent of the wisteria
seems far away
                         Yosa Buson (1716-1784)
a mountain village
under the piled-up snow
the sound of water
                         Masaoka Shiki (1867-1902)

My revisions:

scent and color pale

(Clément Rosenthal)

scent and color pale
wisteria in moonlight
haunting in absence



after winter storm

The Metropolitan Museum of Art
(Utagawa Hiroshige)

after winter storm
mountain village recovers
heavy snow melting