unexpected gift ~ tanka

Carpe Diem #1775 Morning Glory! is part of a new feature,
“Carpe Diem’s Transformation,” which has the goal of using the scenes and images
of a given haiku to create a transformed haiku into a tanka.

Another feature of Carpe Diem is to create a Tan Renga, a short exercise that adds two lines to a given haiku to create a tanka. Making a distinction, I have interpreted this new prompt
to be a challenge to first transform a given haiku by re-creating it
before adding two lines to make it a tanka.

The haiku provided (in blue) is by Chiyo-Ni, and my tanka follows.

morning glory!
the well bucket-entangled,
I ask for water

unexpected gift
morning glory filled with water
refreshing my thirst
accepted as good omen
a fresh start to my travels

Image source: morguefile.com / rollingroscoe

to listen ~ troiku

to listen,
fine not to listen, fine too…


to listen,
accept the sounds around you
try to understand

fine not to listen, fine too…
being a part of that world
accepting each voice

singing for all who listen
knowing when to sing

I try to finish a troiku in one sitting, but it can be time consuming. I set this one aside, so it was not finished before the prompt window closed. The original haiku (in blue) by Chiyo-Ni was provided last week in Carpe Diem #1686 Troiku Month – Nightingale.

A troiku is three haiku, with each of the three lines from a suggested haiku as the first line of each haiku in the troiku. It’s not always possible to have a 5-7-5 format in the second haiku, due to the limitations of the suggested haiku. The name of the form is derived from “troika,” a sled or carriage drawn by three horses harnessed side-by-side, an iconic symbol of Imperial Russia.


The Metropolitan Museum of Art
Roses and Bamboo with Nightingale, by Teisai Hokuba
Wikimedia Commons (troika)

From Ashes to Ocean Spray ~ tan renga

These are my responses to Tan Renga Challenges #1654 to #1657. In a Tan Renga, a two-line stanza is written to follow a single given haiku, creating a tanka. Below, each of the given haiku (in blue) is accompanied by the name of its author, followed by my response.

#1654 Smoldering Fireplace

smouldering fireplace
the sweet perfume of burned herbs
loneliness grabs my throat
               © Chèvrefeuille

love completely exhausted
leaving nothing but ashes

#1655 Beautiful Ugliness

unworthy to look at
beautiful ugliness
               © Yozakura

staying cool within its shade
thankful for its tasty fruit

#1656 Dandelion and Butterfly

a dandelion
now and then interrupting
the butterfly’s dream
               © Chiyo-Ni

airy white and fragile wings
both dancing on gentle breeze

#1657 Ocean Sanctuary

sunday morning
all the waves in white
kneeling on the beach
               © Jane Riechhold

sun shining through ocean spray
seeing beauty in new light

a favor received follows ~ renga

The challenge for Carpe Diem #1512 Chiyo-Ni … THE female haiku master (Renga with…) is to create a renga (or chain of verses) by following each provided haiku by Fukuda Chiyo-Ni (here in blue italics) with two lines. A “closed chain” is attained when the hokku (starting verse) and ageku (closing verse) connect in a way to make “the circle” complete.

morning glory drinksmorning glory!
the well bucket-entangled,
I ask for water

a favor received follows
lifetime of favors given

to listen,
fine not to listen, fine too…

discerning ear understands
birdsong appreciated

sound of things
dropping from the tree–
autumn wind

adding years like fallen leaves
lauding all they have given

a single spider’s thread
ties the duckweed
to the shore

a hand extended, respect
beauty like age, perception

a favor received followsa dandelion
now and then interrupting
the butterfly’s dream

thoughts more agile than actions
limitations while aging

parents older than I
are now my children
the same cicadas

longer years bring shorter days
a bucket slowly empties

Wikimedia Commons  – Chiyo-Ni standing beside a well, by Utagawa Kuniyoshi
Museum of Fine Arts Boston  – Parent and Child, by Katsushika Taito II

showers in the night

showers in the night.jpg

showers in the night
lone cloud courting night crescent
each drop holds a moon

The challenge in Carpe Diem Crossroads #2 the summer moon is to write
a new haiku inspired by the words in two classic haiku (“fusing” them).

a thousand gallons
shower from the eaves…
cherry blossoms
                    Kobayashi Issa

it touches the line
of my fishing pole –
this summer moon
                    Fukuda Chiyo-Ni

I have taken it one step further by revising each of the original haiku,
an exercise that Kristjaan sometimes offers at Carpe Diem.

April showers
drumming on cottage roof
blossoms open


silent water
my pole bent by hungry fish
ripples in the moon

Image: composite of two sources at wikimedia.org, here (Issa) and here (Chiyo-Ni)