one by the other
horizon to horizon
a shared light, free of shadow
ere the fall of night
and early in the morning
sun and moon in an embrace
As a birthday gift to myself (and my lovely wife, of course) this sedoka
was created by revising The Night Is Ours, my poem from yesterday.
I’m sharing this with Colleen’s #Tanka Tuesday
#Poetry Challenge No. 215, #Poet’sChoice.
A Sedoka is an unrhymed poem composed of two katauta. A katauta is able to stand alone, with three lines and a syllable pattern of 5-7-7. A Sedoka therefore has the syllable count: 5-7-7, 5-7-7. Each katauta must be able to be read independently, but also create a cohesive singular work in the Sedoka.
A fine revision! And a happy birthday to you!🙂
My mom’s birthday is tomorrow.
Pat
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Thank you, Pat.
Our mothers shared the day. I was an early birthday present, arriving six hours before midnight, sparing her labor on her birthday.
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Wow! So you were kind from the very beginning! I can just hear her telling that story 🙂.
Pat
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Happy Birthday – and year ahead!
I like this poetic distillation!
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Thank you. 🙂
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Ken, your poetry is fabulous. The Sedoka form is quite expressive and I like the patterned stanzas. Happy Birthday!
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Thank you.
It is a nice form that offers new possibilities.
And thank you!
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I agree.
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A fine birthday present! (K)
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🙂
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A wonderful birthday gift and much enjoyed Ken..
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Thank you. 🙂
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I really do like this form and I am going to try one this week for Colleen’s Tuesday Tanka.
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Done excellently, I might say!
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Your explanation is so good. 💜
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Oh! and Happy Belated Birthday 🎁🥂🎂🍾
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Thank you. 🙂
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