Long Time Coming ~ prosery

/ Ken Gierke / rivrvlogr

Long Time Coming

When it is over, said, and done, it was a time and there was never enough of it. It’s a wonder that it lasted as long as it had when we were never able to truly communicate. Even when we started out, our needs were never the same, but neither of us understood there was never any way either of us would change the other.

We would never get any more from it than we had. Opposites may attract, but the simple truth is that time catches up, and we had to accept that the prospect of reward was long gone from our relationship. The one long-lasting reward, of course is our children. That can never be taken from us. But comfort and satisfaction from each other will never be ours, and it was time to recognize that.

It was time to move on.

This bit of flash fiction is my response to Prosery Monday: A Time, presented by Merril at dVerse ~ Poets Pub. With Prosery, the challenge is to write a piece of flash fiction with a 144-word limit. Included in the bit of prose is to be a complete line from a poem. My flash fiction also meets the additional challenge of hitting the 144-word mark, exactly.
.For this prompt, the line to be included is from “A Time,” by Allison Adelle Hedge Coke. (the complete poem can be found here)

“when it is over said and done
it was a time
               and there was never enough of it.”

                              – Allison Adell Hedge Coke

Image source: Anne & Saturnino Miranda from Pixabay (edited here)

50 thoughts on “Long Time Coming ~ prosery”

  3. The saddest realization, I think. And I can’t imagine the time is ever really right, instead of just inevitable, unavoidable,and still at least somewhat heartbreaking.
    Great write KG.

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    • Thank you, Gillena. I thought it worked best to write this as a retrospective, which raises the question as to how different it would be if written as if events were occurring.

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  11. A very moving piece or writing, Ken. It’s not quite the same story but as I read this I remembered an old Warren Zevon song. “She’s too good for me.” The chorus is
    I want her to be happy
    I want her to be free
    I want her to be everything,
    She couldn’t be with me.
    It is the anguish that connects the two.

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  12. It is always sad when a relationship comes to an end and difficult to acknowledge. I understand what you mean with ‘Opposites may attract, but the simple truth is that time catches up’ – sometimes we just grow in different ways and at different rates.

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