The Color of Rain
Glad, the days when I hear
the colors in the sky
speaking through the rain,
their voices telling the rain,
“Listen closely and hear
the beauty of the sky.
Your own voice within the sky
is most welcome, rain,
joined with ours for all to hear.”
Glad too, the rain, to hear such welcome in the sky.
This is my response to Words and picture poetry challenge – 1, from Jane Dougherty, where she offers the Francis Ledwidge poem “Thomas McDonagh” with the challenge that we use three words from the poem as the end-of-line words in a tritina, with the Ledwidge poem as inspiration. (a variance, on my part, here)
Tritina ~ a poem with three three-line stanzas and a fourth stanza of one line
~ the same three end words used in the first three stanzas, in this order in successive stanzas: 1,2,3; 3,1,2; 2,3,1
~ the last, one-line stanza using the three words
“The repetition of words in a Tritina makes this form a good match for
a story that uses common speech, for in conversation the repetition of key words is common.” (poetscollective.org)
The three words used here are hear, sky and rain (1,2,3)
Also shared with Open Link Night #262, at dVerse Poets Pub.
Image source: freeimages.com / Michael Koralewski
Ooooo… I gonna try me one of these
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😀
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And you sure had fun with it!
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I love rain like this.
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🙂 Thank you.
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Partners. (K)
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Indeed.
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the colors in the sky speaking through rain….what a beautiful thought.
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Thank you, Lillian. 🙂
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I like how the colors speak through the sky.
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Thank you, Frank.
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Ah, rain to wash your troubles away. Nicely done.
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🙂 Thanks.
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That’s lovely, Ken. The simple statements fit so well with the simplicity of the subjects, the rain, the sky, hearing and listening. Simplicity is what Ledwidge was all about.
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🙂 Thank you. The tritina seems made for that simplicity.
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It does, and I didn’t realise what it was made me choose that form until I read your poem.
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I don’t think we’ve ever used the tritina n MTB; probably should. A very interesting and creative piece. Rain on the tin roof of my deck always soothes me.
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🙂 Thanks, Glenn.
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A gorgeous rain poem, Ken! I especially love how you hint at the sound of rain in the lines:
“Listen closely and hear
the beauty of the sky.”
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Thank you, Kim. 😀
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Such stunning rendition of the form 😀 I must try it out for myself 💝
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Thank you. 🙂
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I really like how this turned out. It pulls one of of their usual perspectives. Looks like a fun form.
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Thank you, Lisa. I’m usually not comfortable with repetition, but every once in a while I get over my bad self.
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🙂
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typo sorry. It pulls one OUT of their usual perspectives.
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Such a welcoming sight! Thanks for sharing!
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Thank you, Grace. 🙂
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I just love this. The exchange between sky and rain; it does feel warm and welcoming. Relentlessly wonderful poem.
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Thank you. 😀
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the colors in the sky
speaking through the rain,
What an interesting thought!
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🙂 Thank you.
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I always believed the rain spoke to us 🙂 This was lovely!
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Thank you. 🙂
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Lovely, Ken–being able to hear the colors of the sky.
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Thank you, Merril. 🙂
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Interesting form. Must give it a try. Nice work.
Pat
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Interesting form. Must give it a try. Nice work.
Pat
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Thanks, Pat. I’ll watch for that.
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