my native town ~ troiku

Carpe Diem #1673 Troiku Month – my native town offers
a haiku by Santoka Taneda (
in blue) to be used to create a troiku.

my native town
far, far away–
burgeoning trees.
               Santoka Taneda
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my native town
standing beside blue water
morning fog melting

far, far away–
remembered through mists of time
distant shores calling

burgeoning trees
tall along the river banks
heron at sunset

A troiku is three haiku, with each of the three lines from a suggested haiku as the first line of each haiku in the troiku. It’s not always possible to have a 5-7-5 format in the second haiku, due to the limitations of the suggested haiku. The name of the form is derived from “troika,” a sled or carriage drawn by three horses harnessed side-by-side, an iconic symbol of Imperial Russia.

Troika

Images
Niagara River
Wikimedia Commons (troika)

13 thoughts on “my native town ~ troiku

    • Thank you, Claudia. I thought it would be simple to focus on one aspect, but my mind starting taking different directions and I had to really focus. Think about your past, your hometown, and that’s bound to happen, I suppose. Since I’ve only been away for 7 years, I don’t know if those different aspects would have occurred to me back then.

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      • I’ve been away from my hometown for 40+ years and with my mother’s death last year I revisited so much of the past (I did not return to the actual place, just in my mind and in sharing with my sister) and I am amazed at how my perspective has shifted and changed. So your poems made a lot of sense to me and said in a beautiful way.

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