The prompt for Carpe Diem #1658 Tan Renga – Wintry Gusts is to write a two-line response to a haiku by Aktagawa Ryunosuke, a.k.a. Gaki (Hungry Ghost) (in blue),
to create a tanka
Wintry gusts:
on the sardine still lingers
the ocean’s color.
Gaki
open nets spreading silver
wide across the sea-tossed deck
Image source: islapedia.com
Your lines could stand alone, but I like how you added another color.
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🙂 Thank you, Merril.
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You’re welcome. 🙂
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What a wonderful image you have created here! I can see the nets filled with silvery fish in my mind’s eye.
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Thank you. 🙂
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Nice completion. My mind went to the silver, too.
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Thank you, Janice.
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What a wonderful pairing of words–open nets. (K)
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Thank you. I think it has a magical feel to it. Release.
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I like how you’ve zoomed in from the wintry gusts and the ocean to the action of fishermen on a boat, Ken.:
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Nice use of imagery. Well done!
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🙂 Thank you.
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