your sleeping breath
night rain revives the earth
waves of sea air
in bright yellow daffodils
nod to the dark wind
© Jane Reichhold
dreaming of moonlight
finding its way through the clouds
moving in the breeze
wet grass shining in new light
as tree frogs call in response
The prompt for Tanka Splendor – Daffodils is to write a tanka
inspired by one written by Jane Reichhold (in blue).
Image source: Green Tree Frog – Missouri Department of Conservation
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Oooo, “moonlight finding its way through the clouds” feels pleasantly disrupting … title implies that light may not yet have reached your spot below the moon … a longing.
And I like the tree frog element. We have toads mating in our pond this week, calling all night long – pretty sure it’s other toads they’re interested in, not the moon … priorities vary. I’ve been taking pics of the toads – maybe something poetic will develop.
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Thank you. 🙂
I’m sure something poetic will develop. And don’t forget those drafts. Poetry is poetry, warts and all. 😉
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An “Ode To Toad” is percolating in my head …
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🙂
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Lovely Tanka; I like that form; two more lines give me some wiggle room. I guess Classic tankas need to have a Nature theme as well.
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Thank you. Nature is the usual theme, but not absolutely necessary. I know I’ve written some that are similar to senryū.
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I specially like that opening line of your tanka. Bring on the rain and frogs.
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🙂 Thank you.
The tree frogs have been speaking up here, lately.
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Nice rewrite! Great images! Love the frog!!
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Thanks, Dwight!
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Beautiful imagery here and you’ve actually included some of my most favorite things that cause me to stop, be appreciative, and feel a bit reflective and thankful: moonlight, sea air, and the lovely sound of tree frogs which we used to hear each night in Bermuda. Thank you for the memories this morning!
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Thank you, Lillian. 🙂
Even with fluctuating temperatures, the tree frogs are a confirmation of spring!
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I like the call of the tree frogs.
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Thanks, Frank.
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Felt like a wonderful Spring night, dewy deep and warmly dark…
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And it was!
Thank you, Rob.
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I would love the sound of tree frogs (I think).
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You would! It soothing and full of life.
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“wet grass shining in new light” – the essence of spring.
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😀
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Wow Ken what a beautiful Tanka you have created inspired on the one by Jane. Chapeau!
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Thank you, Kristjaan!
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