Gone with the Tide
Rising and falling, our energy
was spent trying to stay afloat
in a tide-looped romance.
Our words were faint, as if
water-spoken, and held little
meaning as ringed-sea promises.
The bell-voiced waves washing the shore
sound our names, but there is no response
on this tear-culled night.
The sea, in its moon-blown rising,
removes all trace, our footsteps
together no longer.
The prompt for Poetics: love the words from Laura Bloomsbury at dVerse is to use at least four of a list of given hyphenated words from a list of words used by Dylan Thomas. I’ve used tide-looped, water-spoken, ringed-sea, bell-voiced, tear-culled, and moon-blown.
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rivrvlogr 
This is so beautiful !
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Thank you, Holly. 🙂
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It was my pleasure Rivr.
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🙂🌼
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🙂 🙂
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Romance that dies. Very deep and moving, Ken
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Thank you, Robbie.
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the touching grief of loss
sweet sad
suite
the tide
the water
bell footsteps ring apart
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nothing lasts
forever
except our wish
that it would
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uuuuuugh. beautiful images but that last line is a dagger to the heart.
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Thank you.
Yes, the final blow.
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you have touched on the sadness in so much of Dylan Thomas – lovely use of the word compounds and I especially liked:
“Our words were faint, as if
water-spoken”
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Thank you, Laura.
I wanted to express the futility, as if circumstances meant words were spoken underwater with little chance of being heard.
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This is beautiful it pulls at the heart-strings.
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🙂 Thank you.
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You are capturing life’s melancholy feel these days. Touching and sad. (K)
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I try to stay upbeat, but sometimes I just can’t avoid where the prompts take me.
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It all needs acknowledgement.
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The sea as the vehicle around which the relationship falters is well-used.
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Thank you. 🙂
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You are welcome 🙂
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That 3rd stanza – the whole poem there! Beautiful and poignant, Ken!
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Thank you, Lynne. 😀
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I feel how the sea washes everything away… a great place and even the use of sea as metaphor…
and at the end the sea is silent.
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Thanks, Björn. Too many of the word choices pointed this way for me to ignore them.
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This is well crafted Ken. Bittersweetly romantic, a pleasure to read…!
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Thank you, Rob.
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Sad and beautiful, Ken. The metaphor of the sea–so well done. I was going to pick out some lines, but really the whole thing. 🙂
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Thank you, Merril. I enjoyed this exercise enough to want to do another. I wish I had more time.
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I love how the sea removes all traces and washes everything away. Well done with the challenge.
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Thank you, Grace.
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Flows beautifully, not at all “contrived” sounding. I like it!
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Merci!
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You really nailed this one! I love it! Especially the first stanza!
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I so loved this beautiful poem and the way you connected it to the tide and moon. Bravo!
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Thank you. 🙂
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet.
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Thanks for sharing. 🙂
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