Acquisition
I hold aloft what holds me down,
My sense of self, as yet unsound.
No sense of where my mind should be,
My troubles named, within me found.
And yet this weight that’s placed on me
Need not be what the world should see.
Acknowledging that I’m not bound
May offer possibilities.
All month, I held off from attempting to write a rubaiyat, finding no interest in the form. I guess I just needed something to write about. I found that in Kerfe Roig’s Inquisition. I left this as a comment, and I’m just under the wire for Frank Hubeny’s month-long prompt at dVerse, Poetry Forms: Rubaiyat. This is written in iambic tetrameter, with a rhyme scheme of AABA BBAB.
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Perfect rhythm and rhyme.
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Thank you, Jane. Per our earlier conversation, I really need to be in the mood to write form. I’ve been working on something (beside haiku), off and on, that pulls me away from thinking in meter, and I need motivation to get back to form. I found it, this time.
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I can understand that. It is a different way of thinking about the words and you have to be in the mood. With a strict form the image alone isn’t enough, the words have to sing in tune too.
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I have always been attracted to the eight-syllable line. To read you working it gives me pleasure. “Strict form” indeed. Maybe I am a closet dominatro, LOL.
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Maybe? 😉
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Reblogged this on method two madness and commented:
Ken honors me with his (as always) thoughtful and hopeful response.
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Thank you for sharing and for the inspiration, Kerfe.
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Splendid rubaiya, Ken.
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Thank you, Hélène.
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well done, Ken – flows well – a verse many of us can resonate with.
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🙂 Thanks.
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Nice sound and nice resolution in the last two lines.
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Thanks, Frank.
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I too enjoyed reading your rhyming verses and concluding lines.
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Thank you, Grace.
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Perceptive perception 😉
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😀
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Lovely rhythm and flow, Ken, and nice thought with “Acknowledging that I’m not bound
May offer possibilities.”
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Thank you, Merril.
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Glad you eventually found your subject matter. 🙂
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for inspiration
poetry is best not forced
consideration
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