following long winding path ~ renga

Carpe Diem #1532 Richard Wright’s “A Red Sinking Autumn Sun” asks us to create a renga
(or chain of verses) by following the provided haiku by Richard Wright (here in blue italics)
with two lines. A “closed chain” is attained when the hokku (starting verse)
and ageku (closing verse) 
connect in a way to make “the circlecomplete.

following long winding path_1One magnolia
Landed upon another
In the dew-wet grass.

following long winding path
to village in the valley

Keep straight down this block,
Then turn right where you will find
A peach tree blooming.

sound of bees seeking pollen
scented shower of petals

following long winding path_2

Make up your mind, Snail!
You are half inside your house,
And halfway out!

neighbor waving from window
one more mile to reach my home

All right, You Sparrows;
The sun has set and you can now
Stop your chattering!

longing for peace and quiet
weary from days of travel

You moths must leave now;
I am turning out the light
And going to sleep.

open window calls to you
leaving my mind free to dream

following long winding path_3I am nobody:
A red sinking autumn sun
Took my name away.

left behind along the way
enlightenment in new day

Images
Museum of Fine Arts Boston – Java Sparrow on Magnolia, by Katsushika Hokusai
Library of Congress – Snail and Magnolia, by Utagawa Hiroshige
The Metropolitan Museum of Art – Moths and Butterflies, by Kubo Shunman (edited here)

(I buried this on my hard drive and missed the submission window at Carpe Diem)

3 thoughts on “following long winding path ~ renga

  1. Some of the renga that you do seem like a blending almost into one voice, a completion of a verse. This one seems like two voices–your lines responding like two people talking, and I like your responses–the image of the neighbor waving the window, the weary traveler, the open window.

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