a favor received follows ~ renga

The challenge for Carpe Diem #1512 Chiyo-Ni … THE female haiku master (Renga with…) is to create a renga (or chain of verses) by following each provided haiku by Fukuda Chiyo-Ni (here in blue italics) with two lines. A “closed chain” is attained when the hokku (starting verse) and ageku (closing verse) connect in a way to make “the circle” complete.

morning glory drinksmorning glory!
the well bucket-entangled,
I ask for water

a favor received follows
lifetime of favors given

to listen,
fine not to listen, fine too…
nightingale

discerning ear understands
birdsong appreciated

sound of things
dropping from the tree–
autumn wind

adding years like fallen leaves
lauding all they have given

a single spider’s thread
ties the duckweed
to the shore

a hand extended, respect
beauty like age, perception

a favor received followsa dandelion
now and then interrupting
the butterfly’s dream

thoughts more agile than actions
limitations while aging

parents older than I
are now my children
the same cicadas

longer years bring shorter days
a bucket slowly empties

 Images
Wikimedia Commons  – Chiyo-Ni standing beside a well, by Utagawa Kuniyoshi
Museum of Fine Arts Boston  – Parent and Child, by Katsushika Taito II

14 thoughts on “a favor received follows ~ renga

  1. Amazing … what a wonderful renga. You made it into a very strong story full of emotions. I agree with the others … your ‘ ageku’ is really wonderfull and completes the renga as a kind of epitome. Chapeau … a masterpiece to honor Chiyo-Ni.

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