Carpe Diem Weekend Meditaion Renga with Basho Hineri “autumn coolness” asks us to create a renga (or chain of verses) by following each provided haiku by Bashō with two lines.
(Bashō’s haiku here in blue italics – tr. Jane Reichhold)
Hineri means “with a twist,” and the twist here is to use “autumn coolness…” first,
with the other haiku used in any order.
A “closed chain” is attained when the hokku (starting verse)
and ageku (closing verse) connect in a way to make “the circle” complete.
autumn coolness
each peeling with our hands
melons and eggplant
honor in preparing meal
shared responsibility
to get wet passing by
a man is interesting
bush clover in rain
random encounter today
on path with little travel
swinging bridge
lives are intertwined
in Ivy vines
distance holds no obstacle
security gained through bond
with young leaves
I would like to wipe away
the tears in your eyes
beauty in our surroundings
joy at seeing renewal
a clear night
cooling myself under cherry trees
waves of flowers
sparrow watching from high branch
considering connections
blossoms at their peak
the mountain the same as always
at daybreak
long climb brings pangs of hunger
good friends waiting on descent
Image source: Museum of Fine Arts Boston
Bird and Mountain Cherry, by Utagawa Hiroshige
Circles back nicely!
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🙂 Thanks, Jazz!
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Your poem is written with so light touch, a delight. Like life it circles and
your friends are waiting – maybe with a meal. 😉 .
miriam
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Thank you, Miriam.
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I like how the flow of verse flows with the illustration.
There are layers of magic just like a layer cake.
autumn coolness is the frosting on the cake 🙂
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Thank you.
I like that analogy.
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I love the sparrows that are following you around. (K)
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Thank you, Kerfe.
I’ll be happy if they can arrange to make a showing now and then. 😉
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I’m sure they can!
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I love the sparrow watching and considering, and then the way you return to eating with friends. Nature and friendship!
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Thank you, Merril.
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I particularly liked the lines about the sparrow watching from a high branch considering connections. Nice ending as well bringing us full circle.
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Thank you, Janice. 🙂
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What a beauty Ken. A full circle of life with a leading role of sparrows.
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Thank you, Kristjaan.
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