pleasures of quiet evening – renga

The challenge for Carpe Diem’s Renga Challenge #5 such a fragrance is to create
a renga (or chain of verses) by following each provided haiku by Bashō
(here in blue italics – tr. Jane Reichhold) with two lines, placing the haiku in any order.
A “closed chain” is attained when the hokku (starting verse) and ageku (closing verse)
connect in a way to make “the circlecomplete.

pleasures of quiet evening.jpgwhat kind of tree
with the unknown flower
such a fragrance

pleasures of quiet evening
accented by temple bells

spring night
someone in retreat is lovely
in the temple corner

rising from contemplation
content in being alone

with a fan
drinking wine in the shadow
of scattered blossoms

tiny bird for company
curious sparrow watching

red plum
creating unobtainable love
blinds of a noble lady

alone in private garden
finding beauty in nature

blossoms at their peak
the mountain the same as always
at daybreak

pleasures of quiet evening_2steadfast while weathering time
old man in mantle of snow

melting away
the brush draws up the water
of a spring

beneath shade of branches
graced by beautiful blossoms

Image source: The Metropolitan Museum of Art
Plum Tree in Blossom, by Kitao Shigemasa
Wine Pot and Cup, by Ryūryūkyo Shinsai

26 thoughts on “pleasures of quiet evening – renga

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  2. Beautiful to read – impressive to follow your pattern toward complete circle.
    Somewhat like doing a jigsaw puzzle with missing pieces, creating those pieces to suit your fancy. This HAS to be a healthy-brain habit – do you do this in one sitting? Or walk around letting it form and reform in your head?

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    • Thank you, Jazz.
      Once I decide on the order of the haiku, I usually do these in one sitting, maybe two. I usually work my way down – unless I have an ending I absolutely want to work towards – but for this one I had my last three two-line stanzas right away six days ago, and then got stuck. I came back to it a few times with no luck, until today, when it seemed to mesh. All along, I had one line for my second two-line stanza that I was determined to make work. Once I threw that out, it all fell together.

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