echoing sunset

echoing sunset.jpg

echoing sunset
waves of grief wash my footsteps
swallowing my heart

This“fusion” haiku (senryū ) is my response to the challenge at
Carpe Diem’s Crossroads #9 Ozaki Hosai’s “on the field”,
inspired by the words in the following two haiku by Ozaki Hosai.

on the field
where evening has died out,
my footsteps

the heart
that seeks something
I release to the sea

               © Ozaki Hosai (revised by Chèvrefeuille)

Image source: unsplash.com (edited here)

 

12 thoughts on “echoing sunset

    • Thank you, Jazz,
      I put some thought into that line. I considered “mirror of sunset” but decided on “echoing sunset,” with more of a haiku feel and sense of haunting that won’t let go.

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