traces of tides
there
and not
a lunar dream
traces left in spaces
between grains of sand
mindless of daylight
dusk or dawn
born of
night
Inspired by “on tides” by Kerfe Roig, at method two madness – her response to Sue Vincent’s Thursday photo prompt: Footprints #writephoto.
Image by Sue Vincent
National/Global Poetry Writing Month ~ Day 18
‘traces left in spaces
between grains of sand’
I love those lines, Ken.
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🙂 Thank you, Sue.
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Traces left in spaces between grains of sand. Fabulous lines.
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Thanks!
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I agree with all above, most excellent lines Ken ❤
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Thank you, Kim.
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Ditto … though what will linger in my head is a tad shorter: “traces left in spaces / between” … intrigued by the connotations of something totally other before and after.
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Thank you, Jazz. What we find (or even put) in those spaces can make all the difference.
If I hadn’t been going for form I would have had different line breaks:
There,
and not. A lunar dream.
Traces left in spaces between
grains of sand, mindless
of daylight, dusk, and dawn.
Born of night.
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I like both … reading poetry, I tune into sequence of words far more than line breaks/form.
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The same for me, but after the initial read I’ll reread, looking for nuance from enjambment – so I tend to consider that as I’m writing.
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How did I miss this? wonderful! Thanks Ken! (K)
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Thank you for the inspiration, Kerfe.
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I love this one. That is poetic language at its best!
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Thank you, thank you, Thank You!!
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Very impressive, Ken.
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Thanks, Robbie. I like that I find inspiration here.
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