Early Spring in Central Park, Paul Cornoyer
Endless Rain
With clouds of grief consuming joy
Missing love can bring no comfort
The very thought brings on the rain
As we seek solace in the rain
Spring and its colors bring no joy
Can we go on without comfort?
Both of us in need of comfort
Still we’re destined to live with rain
To lose a child means losing joy
No joy, no comfort, only rain
This is my response to Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge #47: Spring in the park, a tritina inspired by the painting Early Spring in Central Park, by Paul Cornoyer.
Tritina ~ a poem with three three-line stanzas and a fourth stanza of one line
~ the same three end words used in the first three stanzas, in this order in successive stanzas: 1,2,3; 3,1,2; 2,3,1
~ the last, one-line stanza using the three words in order – 1,2,3
The three words used here are joy, comfort and rain (1,2,3)
Image source: Wikipedia
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That is beautiful, Ken. You make that transition to a different sense in the final lines so effortlessly.
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Thank you.
Since their umbrella is folded, I had thought about the pleasure of the rain having stopped, but I also saw sadness in the scene so I went with that. I didn’t anticipate it being about grief,but once I did I couldn’t let go of it.
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It feels right to me. I also felt sadness in the scene. the woman’s expression is full of it.
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Wonderfully written but so sad as well.
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Thank you.
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That last line really catches the heart. (K)
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Depending on the three words, this form can get pretty intense.
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I’m discovering that (still processing…)
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This is so beautiful and so sad. The last line is so exquisitely poignant.
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Some carry on more easily than others.
Thank you.
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This is so poignant. Beautifully written, and it feels so true.
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It’s interesting, the many interpretations the image offers.
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Oh my! So beautiful, so sad. Well done, Ken!
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Thank you. Many years ago, friends lost a college-aged son to suicide. It was hard just witnessing the toll it took on them. I really don’t like channeling something like that, but sometimes it just comes out.
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I can understand how something like that would come out. I’m sorry for your friends’s loss.
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Nice blogg post
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Thank you.
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