With sudden dark
Summer’s storms announce their intent
With sudden dark
While the clouds send us livid sparks
Lightning strikes, and when they relent
They leave us, all energy spent,
With sudden dark
Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge #45: Summer storm is to write a rondolet inspired by her photo and using the theme summer storm.
Rondolet ~ 7 lines with 2 rhymes – AbAabbA
~ the refrain has 4 syllables.
~ the other lines have 8 syllables
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I like the way the meaning of the refrain shifted slightly.
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Thanks. I was tempted to go with something else from the start, but realized I could make that shift.
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Those kind of techniques are difficult to make work. Bravo you 🙂
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. . . and how does that make you feel?
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While the sight is impressive, I’m frustrated by the effect on the lawn I’ve been trying to seed since I moved 3 years ago. It’s a hillside that insists on sending my uphill neighbor’s runoff to the drainage swale at the end of my lot. It can be a torrent at times.
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Ah yes, the summer storms. Threat, and thrill.
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And you have the perfect viewing spot.
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I really like this–and I love how you worked in the change in meaning.
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Thanks. It was a fortunate opportunity.
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🙂
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That works so well. Really cleverly constructed, but with seams showing!
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Yes, like movements! I hadn’t thought of that.
Thank you.
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The refrain is powerful. Beautifully written!
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Thank you!
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