No guiding star
Will aid us on this windless sea
No guiding star
With gems so cursed and home so far
We thought our life would be carefree
No thought to what our fate would be
No guiding star
This is my second response to Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge #37: Red boat, write a rondolet inspired by Odilon Redon’s La Voile jaune (The Yellow Sail).
As seen at Odilon Redon – The Complete Works, a boat (or barque) appears frequently in his paintings.
Rondolet ~ 7 lines with 2 rhymes – AbAabbA
~ the refrain has 4 syllables.
~ the other lines have 8 syllables
Image source: Indianapolis Museum of Art
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AHH. Now they’ve gone and got lost. Sad.
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🙂
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breezing up, Winslow Homer
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Ah, Daniel, you sly devil!
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https://rivrvlogr.wordpress.com/2016/06/29/fair-wind-blow/
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I see you rose to the bait 🙂 I like this one, even though there’s a helplessness about it.
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And now, they’re lost and cursed.
I like this one, too.
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They were fine until they took that jeweled eye from the idol.
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Next time they’ll pay attention when they watch the movie.
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lol
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Oh…lost…should have fought instead
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Or, should not have been so greedy. 😉
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Greed …then must be punished…
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Oh, this one’s dark. And thought-provoking. I love this as well!
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ah Ken…I love this one…:)
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🙂
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