To sail away
Let’s set a course across the sea
To sail away
We’ll board our barque at break of day
And journey then most leisurely
Together, as we’re meant to be
To sail away
Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge #37: Red boat is to write a rondolet inspired by Odilon Redon’s La Voile jaune (The Yellow Sail), using the word journey.
As seen at Odilon Redon – The Complete Works, a boat (or barque) appears frequently in his paintings.
Rondolet ~ 7 lines with 2 rhymes – AbAabbA
~ the refrain has 4 syllables.
~ the other lines have 8 syllables
Image source: Indianapolis Museum of Art
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You make it look very easy! I like the way this flows along, so you don’t feel the form imposes at all. Skill! As my son would say…
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Thank you.
It just seemed to flow from the painting.
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This just goes with the flow, as Sarah says ๐ I think I’m going to have to find a poem that isn’t quite so dreamy. Just to add a bit of contrast to the magic.
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This got me to thinking, so I wrote another rondolet:
https://rivrvlogr.wordpress.com/2016/06/29/adrift/
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I had another go too ๐
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Very sweetly crafted.
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Thank you.
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This makes me happy. It would make a good song.
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Sung from a hammock on deck!
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Yes, a song. (K)
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I love the flow of the poem=) Gentle and beautiful. A great take on the prompt!
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You are a master at this Ken! I am in awe! ๐
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Thank you, Kat!
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