Slowly drifting, turning ‘round
Riding on the faintest breeze
Floating past without a sound
Omen of a coming freeze
Riding on the faintest breeze
Vibrant hues of red and gold
Omen of a coming freeze
Season’s passing here foretold
Vibrant hues of red and gold
Gentle, still, upon a stream
Seasons passing, here foretold
A vessel now, so it would seem
Gentle, still upon a stream
Floating past without a sound
A vessel now, so it would seem
Slowly drifting, turning ‘round
This is my reply to Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge #21: Pantoum.
Pantoum ~ a series of quatrains, with the second and fourth lines of each stanza repeated as the first and third lines of the next stanza. In addition, the first and third lines of the first stanza reappear as the fourth and second lines of the last stanza. Where possible, ideas of repeating lines shift (via punctuation, etc.).
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Image: Sycamore leaf on a Missouri stream
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Ahhhh. Lovely verse. The repetition really gives this poem a feeling of drifting movement. You’re another one who’s still stuck in autumn by the sounds of it 🙂
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Thank you.
Yes, autumn is my favorite season.
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Masterfully crafted . . . No pun intended . . .
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😉
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Lovely! I love how the floating leaf becomes a vessel.
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Thank you.
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This makes use of the form really well. The rhythm of it is so important. (K)
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Thanks!
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Beautiful Ken…a captured contemplative moment …brings me there. 😊
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This is so lilting and beautiful.
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Thank you. This seemed to write itself, though the photo probably played a big part.
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Love the way it was when you read it… really worked out well. It is hard to use the repeated lines so well.
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Thank you. I do enjoy the form.
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Love the illustration chosen for the post. Love the floating….and so enjoyed hearing you read it. Thanks for explaining the pantoum…you’ve mastered the form here so we concentrate on the meaning.
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Thank you, Lillian.
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I enjoy pantoums, and this is a lovely one with beautiful flow. I see I commented on it before, but it was great to hear you read it today.
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Thank you, Merril. The photo, one of my favorites, has inspired a few poems.
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You’re welcome, Ken.
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This is so lovely. Enjoyed your reading of it.
Much❤love
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Thank you, Gillena. ❤
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Seems like a serene ride of a gentle river! Beautifully done.
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🙂 Thank you, Dwight.
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You are welcome!
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This is absolutely exquisite, Ken! The Pantoum form is a difficult feat to accomplish so I really admire how smoothly this one flows. Kudos!! 💖💖
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Thank you so much, Sanaa. 🙂
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Feeling it Ken! Great flow to this! 👏👏
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😀 Thank you.
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Welcome! 💐
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Such beautiful sounds in this poem, Ken! I’d enjoy listening to this one, I know already!
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😀 Thank you!
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